Life Gone By

Today I share my one and only Tritina. This is a rather interesting poetic form that forces your brain to do some interesting mental gymnastics.

Here’s a decent explanation of the form: http://www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/tritina.htm

And here’s my take on it:

Life Gone By (Tritina form)
© W. Scott Grant
October 30, 1999, 9:00 pm

I miss those days when I had more time
As mom dragged me around by my wrist
To malls, movies and plays to watch.

I grew older, I found something else to watch…
I remember when I saw her the first time
Silken hair, sparkling earrings, bracelet on her wrist.

Now I’m bound, like a shackle on my wrist
Life’s so busy, I can no longer stop and watch
The world goes by, I never have the time.

My time is ruled by my wrist watch.

 

 

2 thoughts on “Life Gone By

  1. Tritina sounds like a mini Sestina… I like how the stanzas about time move through the phases of your life–child, young adult, older person. I mentioned a “Timex, with a digital face” in one of my poems and someone said that made the poem feel “dated” because no one wears a watch anymore, we all use our iPhones for that. There is a sestina about my changing relationship with coffee on my blog… let me go find it. OK, it’s at https://justjoan42.wordpress.com/2016/03/27/java-beans-not-jelly-beans/. Enjoy. 🙂

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  2. I’ll check our your poem when I get home tonight. I gotta go meet my wife for dinner – we’re celebrating paying off one of our debts. Woo hoo! Mama Carolla’s (http://mamacarollas.com/) I can’t remember if I’ve written any Sestinas. None come to mind. I’ll check out that form and see if I can come up with something. Since I’m off work Monday, I’ve already scheduled out the next three days of poetry. I’ll still check in, and if I write something new worthy of sharing, I’ll post it anyway.

    In terms being dated, I got my first cell phone about a year later and have had one ever since. I can’t remember the last time I wore a watch!

    Thanks!

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